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Words of Truth- by iemagazine
So I decided to make a poem today that took about 5 mins to think of based on some stuff that happened in my life recently, I am going to put it here to be looked at and judged upon. Thanks for your time.
I didn't put this in the music section of the off-topic thread because I felt it didn't really belong there.
I would like to know other's opinions on the poem I wrote. Seeing this as my 2nd poem I have ever done I don't expect it to be absolutely great or perfect. But to me all that matters are that the people read it.
Words of Truth by iemagazine.
I help people cause I see myself in them.
How I used to sit in a corner with my lights dim.
I would just cry and cry for being alone.
Till I found a place I could call home.
4 friends who I truly connect with saved me.
And they made me discover who I CAN be.
Out of the fray and into a new place.
And I struggled through it with great haste.
I help people now because it is who I stride to be.
Because many people dislike them just like me.
There will always be those people who dislike my words.
But then there will be those few who actually heard.
I will change the world one at a time.
Because people listen to words more when they rhyme.
That one person who heard my words.
Will flock to others like birds.
They will spread the help far and wide.
To help those people who know nothing but to cry.
One day the Truth in my Words will be remembered.
Because those few that listened will stand together.
The truth of my words will be spread like a wild fire.
Spreading faster, farther, and wider.
I leave my mark on the world with this poem.
To help people even though I don't know them.
There will always be those that judge this as stupidity.
Others will accept it blissfully.
I will hold these words close to my heart.
Knowing that they will never fall apart.
I help people cause I see myself in them.
How I used to sit in a corner with my lights dim.
I would just cry and cry for being alone.
Till I found a place I could call home.
4 friends who I truly connect with saved me.
And they made me discover who I CAN be.
Out of the fray and into a new place.
And I struggled through it with great haste.
I help people now because it is who I stride to be.
Because many people dislike them just like me.
There will always be those people who dislike my words.
But then there will be those few who actually heard.
I will change the world one at a time.
Because people listen to words more when they rhyme.
That one person who heard my words.
Will flock to others like birds.
They will spread the help far and wide.
To help those people who know nothing but to cry.
One day the Truth in my Words will be remembered.
Because those few that listened will stand together.
The truth of my words will be spread like a wild fire.
Spreading faster, farther, and wider.
I leave my mark on the world with this poem.
To help people even though I don't know them.
There will always be those that judge this as stupidity.
Others will accept it blissfully.
I will hold these words close to my heart.
Knowing that they will never fall apart.
I didn't put this in the music section of the off-topic thread because I felt it didn't really belong there.
I would like to know other's opinions on the poem I wrote. Seeing this as my 2nd poem I have ever done I don't expect it to be absolutely great or perfect. But to me all that matters are that the people read it.
Alive and Kicking again, [SECRET], former artist, I lose all my matches.
Should've put more than five minutes into it. ;v
Rhyming couplets make it seem like a children's poem which doesn't fit what you are trying to express at all.
Forcing rhymes kinda makes the poem jumpy.
Before you know it you are moaning of desire while trying to set things on fire.
Rhyming couplets make it seem like a children's poem which doesn't fit what you are trying to express at all.
Forcing rhymes kinda makes the poem jumpy.
Before you know it you are moaning of desire while trying to set things on fire.
IE you would rather seen it in a
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is just too simple.
one form of poetry I like the most are the senses poems, a poem about hour ur senses are reacting to certain scenarios.
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format
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is just too simple.
one form of poetry I like the most are the senses poems, a poem about hour ur senses are reacting to certain scenarios.