beginning to work on some dreary edgar allan poe like stories
so basically i felt like writing stories with a dark tone to them as i enjoy edgar allan poe's works, the current story im working on ive been working on for about 15 minutes and i plan to add a lot more
CnC is greatly appreciated and dont shy to tell me what my stories need and improvements on vocabulary and the current story isnt well structured or anything but i felt like i should get some advice on to how to improve my writing abilities so here it goes:
"The epitome of internal damnation, what is it? "Is it the realization of one's sheer futility?" "Perhaps it may be something upon the limits of oneself." "Internal damnation for many may be the ignorance of which they possess but cannot rid, or it may be the knowledge that true enlightenment is unachievable through conventional means and the fear to be judged by one's peers for seeking happiness in a way that could lead one to be considered "an anomaly of society"". "What is real enlightenment? Is it the inevitability of death itself rendering one to become almost numb from the hell of which is existence?" "Personally for me, my damnation and enlightenment are one in the same." "Existence as a whole is quite maddening for myself as I do believe my sanity has been slowly drifting away from myself as a paper boat on water does from a child". "What do you think Luci?" "Oh how I do ponder ways we could communicate, but given our current position, I fear the worst scenario is the crushing reality of the world that we inhabit." "It's a shame that our lives together could've been a long lasting story filled with regrets and mistakes, oh how I wish i could damn reality for fantasy!" "Why did you have to put others above yourself?" "It could've been so easy for us if you'd just heed my words when I spoke of the man."
again cnc is appreciated
thanks
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