this (expergefactor) is pretty good, but there are a few problems:
during your opener almost your entire upper body ghosted into your arm and it looked weird and the same thing happened later with your left arm and your right knee a little later and then soon after it ghosts through again
another problem is your use of arms. your arms seem to be constantly switching from raised to lowered and it looks weird, try to to keep the in the middle to make better movements
another thing i noticed is that you hold movements for too long, for example, at 300, you keep that same setting on your joints for roughly 25 frames which is far far too long
another thing is that your wrists, and this is very nitpicky, shouldnt be lifting you, imo it should either be your entire arm raising/lowering, elbows or your legs
another thing is your launches. you always want to launch from a stable position, which you really did not do here.
the clothesline to ukes lumbar was pretty cool but your arm was raised too much and made it look awkward.
i agree with spirals, the knee for the decapitation was refreshing to see but it wasnt executed very well because your hip was pretty much fully extended on impact which makes it look like the decap was caused by you pulling uke onto your knee rather than your knee hitting uke. and the follow through wasnt great cause you just extended it again after contracting it (after the decap).
once again, i agree with spirals, youre using your chest too much, once you move your chest you should keep it that way until something naturally stops your momentum. and for practise you should try keeping you chest neutral and generating momentum
some tips:
-when you launch, before you enter midair relax your knees to make it less jarring
-dont extend and contract your knees too much
-try and keep your torso adjacent to the ground while your making contact with it
-try and land flat footed on the ground, improves stability and realism
-i also forget to do this often, but try to grab only once your hand touches whatever you want to grab, it makes it look cleaner
dont get me wrong, this is really good for a first attempt, but the only way people improve is with proper criticism and advice and i hope this helps you. also i had to turn flames off to cnc this cause your flames are too op ;0.
Last edited by EPOCH; Jul 31, 2019 at 02:16 AM.
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