I quite like this.
Your velocity is good and I like your slight zooms with the replay.
your p/c is decent, work on it a little bit to make it really nice looking.
your transitions are on the slower side, you should speed it up just a tad bit and it'd make the flow a bit better.

All in all you're a good editor and keep it up c:

Pretty nice, next time you record make sure to /opt bruise 0 and /opt grip 0