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Night Shadows: Slow openers are nice, but I think you waited just a bit too long. Lots of destruction, but I think you should have gotten a few more dms if possible. Good job losing your head haha.
Praise Be: You're pretty flimsy in this one. You should hold some more joints. The side flip was strange because you hit uke, but it was so light of a hit it should have been left out. Decap wasn't bad, but you should try to aim more for the neck, as well as gain better kicking form. Decent pose, but you should make it look a little more natural.
Twisty~Twerly: Some of the kicks were from weird positions, but there was lots of dismemberment, and the concept was there. The pose was a little awkward, but well done otherwise.
Bifo Foucus: I actually really liked this. Nice way to turn Uke on his head. Good bifurcate, but you should have added a touch more to the replay in my opinion. Still, good job.
Fire Burns On: Strange punch for the decap, and the double pencil type kick was weird, but other than that, it wasn't too bad. The way you re-hit Uke's leg as you went for the pose was awkward.
Pure Panda: Strange opener, but the backhand was unexpected and I like that. The first kick should have been with your left leg with it's first extension rather than a scisor kick (type thing). You stumbled over Uke a bit, but but it happens to everybody.
Decap #1: I liked this. Good kick to bring Uke up, and decent decap. Not much else to say haha.
Overall, you're doing pretty well. I'd say, hold a few more joints to work on your realism, do some more poses to get better (I'm really bias), and try do do a longer opener next time. Sorry for being a harsh CnC-er!
Lastly, HOLD YOUR NECK!
Continue :]
Praise Be: You're pretty flimsy in this one. You should hold some more joints. The side flip was strange because you hit uke, but it was so light of a hit it should have been left out. Decap wasn't bad, but you should try to aim more for the neck, as well as gain better kicking form. Decent pose, but you should make it look a little more natural.
Twisty~Twerly: Some of the kicks were from weird positions, but there was lots of dismemberment, and the concept was there. The pose was a little awkward, but well done otherwise.
Bifo Foucus: I actually really liked this. Nice way to turn Uke on his head. Good bifurcate, but you should have added a touch more to the replay in my opinion. Still, good job.
Fire Burns On: Strange punch for the decap, and the double pencil type kick was weird, but other than that, it wasn't too bad. The way you re-hit Uke's leg as you went for the pose was awkward.
Pure Panda: Strange opener, but the backhand was unexpected and I like that. The first kick should have been with your left leg with it's first extension rather than a scisor kick (type thing). You stumbled over Uke a bit, but but it happens to everybody.
Decap #1: I liked this. Good kick to bring Uke up, and decent decap. Not much else to say haha.
Overall, you're doing pretty well. I'd say, hold a few more joints to work on your realism, do some more poses to get better (I'm really bias), and try do do a longer opener next time. Sorry for being a harsh CnC-er!
Lastly, HOLD YOUR NECK!
Continue :]
Lol, "HOLD YOUR NECK!" haha. Thank you so much for the cnc, It really does help me make better replays. the fact that you took time for all of then I thought was pretty cool. for some of them, now that I look back on them I see the concerns you have and agree completely. Hopefully I won't make those mistakes again!
Thought I would throw this in, not that hard to fix
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Before I go any father, Is the opener good?
Thought I would throw this in, not that hard to fix
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Before I go any father, Is the opener good?
Last edited by Zorow; Sep 11, 2014 at 06:44 AM.
Reason: <24 hour edit/bump
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