I think I could give you some tips on tori control and momentum/power if you want, but I'd rather talking to you through discord if possible. Just send me your discord contact in PM if you want it
But, as for less detailed cnc, the two main issues I see with your cheat is: 1 - your inclination in 1400 leading to another not-so-good disposition in mid-air in 1360 that made your kick way more difficult to do; and 2 - the "lack" of power made everything I already mentioned worse and precluded a safe and good landing
Other than these 2 points nothing looks really bad and extra points for this sweet opener/setup, looked pretty sweet