hey
before i start cncing i just wanna say i feel like you have the basics of movement down so well, the way you move looks really sick and i feel like if you get a better sense of style and attempt harder and more crazy stuff you'll get really good
OK
the openers on both halves were really neat
i kind of liked tori's opener more but it's kinda just preference and that little nimble step that uke took was really sick too
contacts in spars look nice when done right, however i thought that first contact with the legs was really dumb, reason being it stopped the flow of both tori and uke
if one leg went over the other in the sweep, i feel like it would have looked a lot nicer. both would have kept their flow and been able to keep spinning in a way that looks neat
uke's upper body from 940-915 looked really janky, you raised and lowered your shoulders a bunch and it looked kind of ugly
the movement on tori wasn't bad but i don't really feel as if it fit the replay, like right after a collision you did a swingthrough, and your momentum kind of completely reversed
i feel like it would have been better to just come down from the kick back into a regular low-down position you could move from
the kick uke did at 910 looks nice, but it didn't really look like it was directed at tori, it was headed in the wrong direction sort of
the position you had at 882 for uke was really good for a spin of some sort, but the way you launched made it so that you had literally no rotation other than a frontflip.
it kind of made it really obvious that you were setting up for the kick that tori did, and it took away from the style a lot
the way tori got up from the kick was really nice, other than a twitch with your right knee that was a really nice movement
the way uke got up from the kick wasn't too bad but i feel after taking a kick he should have gotten up a little sloppier, it looked like he went unconscious and regained consciousness within the air time he had
i like everything after that. you utilized both launch setups pretty well, and the spins both looked nice, especially with how close they were
my only complaint is that the k.o itself looked a little light
i know the replay glitches here, but the movement from frame 615 up until the end from uke is honestly the biggest display of skill in the whole replay, i really would have loved to see what that looked like without the glitching because your movement was really nice
in summary, try avoid counter rotations since that was my biggest issue with this replay and make your contacts heavier, since most of the hits didn't seem to hard
sorry about the replay glitch that would have looked sick :^(
gj on this though