Man, i look (bleep)ing sick in the first replay, second you zoom in on my face. Nice.
So; to improve.
Shorten the intro.
After the over voice says "Here are the thrill seekers" You should jump into all kinds of crazy shit. Though, if you do that the music should set off.
If you want to keep it slow
The beat is good how it is, rewinding MD's replay was a smart idea but labelling "Uke" wasn't. No need.
Bloxam's camera angle
It was a bit shitty from 0:39; you should have suck with that angle, or if you wanted to bring it up from his lower right and follow his legs it would have been sweet, but at 0:41 the camera goes a tad weird and you only see enough of the move to understand it's a decap.
You did my scene fine
I liked how you slowed it down and shown me off well. The only thing i could pick at is the camera spazzes at 0:48 and in 0:49 you loose focus on the battle.
When on Loje's replay
The red flooring just appears in 1:05. Not sure if that was an effect you wanted, but i'd try to keep it with the default settings, because the floor texture looks shite and it's hard to tell Loje from the floor unless you're paying awesome attention due to the shitty quality.
Dont break the flow
From 1:12 there's just a flow breaking black screen untill 1:21, but at least the beat picks up a fraction.
Uke vision
I also noticed you use Uke's vision a couple of times, dont, it's much better to see whats happening 3rd person.
Cam spasms
Then there's alot of cam spasming from 1:37 'till when Uke's head rolls in at 1:44.
Music
It suits the video alright i suppose, though, i was listening to Mindless Self Indulgence - You'll Rebel To Anything, and it was alot cooler. :3
Quoting the song
You use alot of quotations from the song, and type them about the screen, dont; let the song do the talking, you show off the skills.
Font
Bit simple, could be more badass, but nothing major, i'm just picking.
Finally
Thanks for reading, note; i'm only trying to help, i dont know if any of this is possible, just my thoughts.
DO NOT THINK THAT YOU HAVE TO REDO THE VIDEO, IT'S FINE, I'M JUST GIVING YOU CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISISM.
Last edited by Gynx; Jan 28, 2009 at 09:23 PM.