Definitely rusty.
Try to add more flow into it. And you're having the same problems I have which is being too slow. It'd be alright if you had better flow, but otherwise the replay is kinda meh. It's like reading an essay or article. You wanna start off really strong so that the reader(watcher?) is captured by the text(replay). Starting off strong can also inspire you to make everything else just as good.
tl;dr add purposeful faff because it can be good