Wrote this bladda bladda, was inspired by Jodarok and by the song "On the floor"... Anyways just tell me how bad I suck at poetry pls.

"Pierce my life and turn the page
Nothing changes although I age
Play me to life with your strong, hearty beat
Brush aside my hair and dance away on my feet
I just don't want to do this anymore
I just want to get down on the floor
I'm going to dance the night away
Without a care of what they say
Swaying along to match the beat
As I put to work my graceful feet
Hold me close unto yourself
Something I couldn't do by myself
The music slows down all by much
Still we dance and sway and such
Look into your eyes, I must
I'm swept away by strong lust
You sweep me off my feet and carry me away
"I love you" is all I can manage to really say "

Oh 'Jodarok' mentioned. bby <3
As i said before, i don't know anything about poetry it sure as shit rhymes and +5 point for it reminding me of that song, wich i noticed first of all.

fuck you, you didn't type ale is neat

instead of I love you ale is neat woud have been better

I do what I want noob.

he called me a noob guys

he called me a noob

guys

Well done wolfe.

Neat.

here I made one too

ale is neat
he has nice feet
and when he takes a seat
It'll be on my meat

Ty


Ty ty


Response poem:

Ale is neat
Only when discreet
He hides in the shadows like a creep
Its quite lovely when he begins to seep

\o/

Ah yes the good ole A-A-A-A rhyme scheme.